I like your updated design for Jeff, he looks even less remarkable than before. As always, I will enjoy filling in the gaps of this story with horrifying mental images.
Heh, I have the opposite problem. I love doing action shots, but I never have a decent story to put them in. Your story is so multi-layered that you can leave little points like these to the imagination without detracting from the overall plot. That's what makes it fun to read.